Example RP from Utopia Kingdom

[Kevinness]

(OOC: I think I just broke my toe lol. Also my mind is other places at the moment so dont be suprised if this ain't good. Oh my god, I used ain't, shoot me.)
(OOC: Actually this is going to be short because Astral needs to fill Barax in. Haha you have to work.)

Barax looked over at the trim of the door he had just parseed through to see what had made the loud thud. He had a good guess and was confirmed when he pulled the dagger out of the wood. He unraveled the note and read the cryptic message, "Save them." He was confused, what did this mean? He knew that the note must have come from Frost for no one had that accuracy. He turned to be greeted by Astral coming towards him.

"Barax!" Astral shouted and ran to his friend.
"The Lady Alarseea...", that was all Barax needed to hear before he caught the swift movement of her door closing out of the corner of his eye. He started to move towards the door but was stopped. "Frost won't let you in!"

"Whats going on here" Barax said with a bit of panic in his voice.

"It's a long story! Right now Lady Alarseea is, well not feeling very good. Frost is with her. All I know is that she casted a time-altering spell which drained her of her energies... I think the spell was to complex or something, I'm not good with magic in anycase. Maybe you could convince Frost to let us in..."

Barax was silent, he slowly lowered his eyes to the paper, "And what does this mean?"

Astral took the paper and read it aloud, "Save them..." after a momentary silence Astral spoke again, "I think she's talking about the birds..."

"Birds?" Barax stared at him confused.

Astral slowly tapped Barax on the shoulder, "We have a lot of talking to do," he said softly as he led him to the table where they always sat.

Barax plopped down in the chair and stared at Astral intently, "So what is going on, I haven't been away for that long," he said then put his arm on the table leaning over it waiting for Astral's response.

- The Wise Mr. Barax






Astral slowly began to spoke.
"Are you ready for this?" Astral looked Barax straigh in the eye.
"Well when you went away..."
Astral suddenly thought that this all happened when Barax went away, but quickly shook the idea from his mind that it could've been Barax who caused all the mess.
"Yes.." Barax asked impatiently as he saw Astral fading away into deep thought.
"Oh yeah..umm, yes, well like I was saying you went away and, things began to go hay-wire with the birds not long after you left. Avio" ,Astral gave a quick look at his sleeping friend before he continued, "told me that he couldn't navigate the air because the magical planes Alo Zara, Nal Zartha, Vino Lato and lastly Hano Tsi are mixed up. They use these planes to travel utopia and..."

"Yes, Yes I know about the magical navigation planes, I read about them in tomes..." Barax pointed out.
"Well okay let me make a long story short. Lady Alarseea came home saw what was happening, the birdies crashing into everything and dying, couldn't bear it... SO she cast a time-altering spell so everything would go slower I think? Like a barrier of sort that the birds cant get hurt. Lady Amber also casted a few calming spells to relax the distraught birds. In anycase I think the spell was to draining for the Lady Alarseea, coz she came inside the tavern, said hi, told me and Frosty to find a solution and then she just collapsed. Frost ran with her to her room, and was in there ever since, not answering my calls outside the door, and not opening for ANYBODY!"

Astral took a deep breath, "So thats all I know, I don't even know if the Lady Alarseea is still alive..." and there was a few minutes of momentary silence before Barax spoke again.

"She's alive... I can feel her" barax mentioned coldly.

- Sir Astral the Warrior

[Kevinness]

(OOC: I can feel her? lmao, That sounds wrong to me, lol. Ok ok, now back to business, and I really do think I broke my toe......)

Barax thought on the situation, "Hmm so thats the whole story?" he asked. He didn't even notice Astrals reply to his outspoken thought. Hmmm, I knew my portal messed with the other planes just a bit, but it shouldn't have caused this much of a problem, and for this long too, Barax thought to himself. Unless it was because of the machine's powers seeping into the portal before it closed causing an off balance in the other planes.... But how to fix that, he pondered. The energies put off by that machine... if I put the same reverse energies through the portal it should cause a push in the planes to settle them back out.

"Astral, I think I figured out a solution, but I'm going to need your help after I'm done."

"Wha-," Astral began to say as Barax got up and dragged him out the door.

"Don't ask for the specifics. You'll know when I'm done. First to negate the spells here," Barax said as he closed his eyes and focused on unraveling both the contentment spell on the area and the one causing the birds to slow themselves.

"What are you doing?" Astral almost shouted when he realized the birds were going their normal speed again crashing into the tavern.

Barax ignored the question as his eyes shot open along with the uncontained portal spell. "Get ready for a bumpy ride," he half said to Astral as winds began to rush around his body pushing his light robes around easily. His short cropped hair wavered in the intensing winds as he reached deeper into his powers.

"What are you doing?" Astral shouted out over the roar of the winds, but was still barely heard by Barax.

Trees nearby started to bend and Astral ducked to the ground to keep his footing, but Barax still stood like a rock reaching even further into himself. Then the winds abruptly died without even a breeze.

Astral stood back up, "What was tha-."

"Get back down!" Barax shouted.

Astral heeded the warning feeling something in his bones was not right. "At least tell me-"

Before Astral finished his sentence it seemed as if the whole area had been in the center of a thunder clap, the windows of the tavern rattled to their breaking points and finally gave out, jetisoning their glarse shards to spray out on the ground outside, not a single speck heading towards the taverns patrons. Then it seemed as if Mother Nature herself wanted to tear the trees from her own soil, winds whipping aroound everything, clawing to get to the center of their frustration, Barax. He stood there with his eyes closed, calmly still focusing himself. Searching for the paticular strand of magic he had to focus it all through.

"There!" he shouted as he raised his hand. Opening his eyes he focused his eyes into the very center of the portal, seeing the magic within it. Slowly everything faded out of site into a dull grayish blur until only he and the portal remained in what he saw. Then in a flash everything came back to his sight, except it wasn't their physical appearance he was seeing, it was every magical flux, every ounce of magic each little thing contained within them. The colors that were shown to him were amazing, he had never seen anything like this. Slowly he beckoned every living thing near to him to give some of its power to correct the planar problem. He felt their power slowly drift to him, he felt the wind enter his very soul giving everything magical it had. He felt like he would burst with all the energies his body was taking in, but he knew it wouldn't be enough.

"Astral," Barax sent the message directly from his mind to Astral.

"What?" Astral thought. Barax could feel the fear running through Astral at what was going on.

"I need you to lend me-" Barax stopped suddenly as he felt a kindred soul pierce the ground beside him.

"Hey master," the thought penetrated his head, "you wouldn't think about doing this without us, right?"

"Us?" Barax thought as suddenly he felt a large presence land softly on the ground too his other side. "Wyvern?" Barax sent the thought out. "But how?" Then it hit him, Alarseea still had the other whistle. Laughing to himself he mumbled under his breath, "Thanks Alarseea, or Frost." Then he focused his thoughts back to the problems at hand. "Ok guys I need whatever you can spare." His thoughts went out replied to with a surge of more energy. He knew he had gone much further past what his breaking point was, but he still needed more. He could still feel the ravaging winds tearing at him and he knew the nearby structures couldn't take much more.

"I'm sorry thats all i can give," Barax felt the thought flow from the wyvern and knew the ethereal mists were gathering to take the wyvern back home so he could recouperate.

"I'm just about out to master," the sword sent.

"We aren't going to have-" Barax started to say as he suddenly felt someone step up beside him. "Astral?" He sent the thought out.

"No, its Frost," he heard the mind beside him think. "Can I help?"

"Yes, focus any magical energies onto me."

"What?" he heard Frost think.

"Nevermind just focus your thoughts on me."

"Ok," Barax heard another voice pipe in, Astral's.

Barax felt enery, though struggling to come out of them, make their way to him. Almost. Barax thought, almost there... He reached into his forbidden reserves of power, power that shouldn't be used unless the sorcerer was going to die anyways. He just needed to use a small bit of that force, just a tiny bit... He felt the force flood his body almost tearing him apart. Yelling at the intense pain trying to ignore it he pulled just a bit more...

He couldn't feel anything for a split second. At first he thought it might have been because he had lost all the magical energies he had gathered. He was completely exhausted. A mortal body should never gather that much power within itself and he knew it. Then the pain ripped through him once more and he opened his eyes back to the magical sight not even realizing they had closed at one point. He knew he now had enough. Slowly he felt the power travel through him down to his arm, down throught the guantlet, and out through his hand. He saw it travel along the one chord of magic towrds the gateway. He knew it could possibly blind him, but he still could not turn away from its sheer power and beauty. He knew Frost and Astral were safe from this though for their eyes could not make the transition to look at the magical fields. It seemed like it was moving ever so slowly, but Barax knew better, he knew it had reached its destination in less than a second, he could already feel the planes had been corrected and were in proper order, he was watching an after image, his body had already fallen to the ground, Astral and Frost were already trying to bring him back to consciousness, but he knew it was no use. Alarseea hadn't even tapped into her life force and she was still out, Barax had tapped into those forbidden things. He knew he would be out for quite awhile after this. He then saw the after image of himself falling to the ground, his eyes still catching up. Sleep, he thought, humble sleep and sweet dreams. He wasn't sure he would live, but then again who was ever sure they would awaken the next morning.

- The Wise Mr. Barax

[Kevinness]

Ok, that was some of the RP from my Utopian kingdom, we went a bit further, but I din't copy them into my comp before I stopped playing Utopia (got a bit boring to play it). I suppose people will have questions, commments, flames and whatnot so leave them here. Incase you didn't catch it I'm Barax. The main people to pay attention too are Alarseea (Swedish, thats why she uses alot of were instead of was), Astral (South African), Frost (Canadian if I remember correctly), and myself (one of the few Americans that was in my kingdom, think there was one other besides me, out of 24 people), Amber makes a few pop ins as well (Finnish or Swedish, can't remember). This is a hugely open RP thats really run by the players and I would like to see the RP become something like this, of course if people want a true D&D type rp I suppose we could do that too... but I feel that puts in too many restrictions. Well anyway leave questions and/or input. Also remember that in RPs you're character does not have to be of any resemblance to you. As a second also, also this was done sometime over the summer with the convention thats mentioned being Otakon of last year (which was the end of July I believe).

[Jackness]

so would this work?

Shadow slowly walked into the cave, and felt a cold chill run down his spine, he slowly went for his knife, and readys himself for a possiable battle.

"okay shadow, just remember the training" he thought to himself.

As he walks down farther intot the cave it gets colder, and darker, he decided to light his torch to see better, and as soon as the sparks hit, it ignites. He see the walls with skeletons covering them, moss everywhere, and a giant dragon sleeping in front of him
"shint" he thought.

something like that, I presume?

[Kevinness]

Yup, remember each player/writer has their own style to go with and eventually those will slowly become tweaked as you learn how to even things out a bit to make everyone's writing semi-flow together, but you can also see how each of the main four people in the RP had their own style and voice into their writing.

One little English bone to pick though, try to stay in the same tense when possible, past tense is usually the easiest to do...

[grayson]

dude those are some long arse posts you and i are probably the only ones with that little time on our hands as i'm part fo another E-mail RPG for set in the trigun universe on yahoo and i have some post that split up would take about two of these pages well peace

[Kaze]

dude... I f**k*n do this shinte all the bloody time. and here i was thinking it'd be some d&d thingie I don't understand. man, this stuff is bloody awsome! ^^ squee! :: hopes that's the kind the kevin is planning on doing. if not, is willing to learn other stuff :: mew!